These are eventful times. I live in the Los Angeles area, where many fires are burning. Our house is in no danger, but we are going to pack a “go bag” just in case we have to evacuate.
It got quite windy today and I heard newscasters, both on radio and television, giving information about the “wind event.” When it rains, we have “rain events.” I led workshops for many automobile companies, and they were fond of staging “sales events.” (Does that suggest balloons and doughnuts?)
Why tack on those “events”? It’s perfectly clear to just say wind, rain, and sale. The event doesn’t make the message any more clear, but it does add an air of pomposity.
Particularly in business writing, I see people often using more words than necessary, perhaps hoping to sound more “professional” and intelligent. However, your readers may likely find this tendency toward verbosity annoying and pompous. Since you want to win your readers over, it’s a good idea to keep your writing concise and precise.
Here is a list of wordy locutions and their shorter alternatives. Give the short ones a try; your readers will thank you.
1. At this point in time (now)
2. At that point in time (then)
3. In a timely manner (soon, promptly, shortly)
4. Until such time as (when, until)
5. With regard to (with reference to) (about)
6. In the event that (if)
7. Prior to, in advance of (before)
8. In the month of October (in October)
9. In the amount of (for)
10. Due to the fact that (because)