I bring you another example from the corporate world:
“As projects tied to [this program] progress, a regular cadence of communication updates will be provided.”
“A regular cadence of communication updates”? Who comes up with these phrases? I am awed by the author’s sense of self-importance. What guts, what courage, what chutzpah to write like that!
Here is my feeble attempt at guessing what the writer meant:
“You will get regular updates about the projects connected to this program.”
It’s a good idea to use the pronoun “you” to involve each reader. It’s also a good idea to use the active voice. Another good idea (I’m full of them today) is to drop some of the slightly la-de-dah words, such as “provide,” and go for something really simple, such as “get.” Stop “purchasing” and start “buying.” Stop “progressing” and just “go.”
